Re: Narrator summoning thread

by **Septon Arlyn** Sat Dec 12, 2015 6:15 pm

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Quite interested to see how this turns out, if you have a moment Smile

Besides, who doesn't love seeing to greens fighting? Although in a fight my money is on Nathan, he is a dirty boy :;
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Also very interesting political implications. With the Septon arguing for a swift merciful death yet against the law, while Nathan is pushing for punishment in line with the law, yet fewer killed. Which is more merciful?

by **Reader** Sat Dec 12, 2015 6:42 pm

Will get to this likely Sunday AM, heading out for tea. Sorry!

by **Nathaniel Mason** Mon Dec 14, 2015 9:44 pm

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Need a response here... then Corrine and I can make investigation rolls and take a tour of the affected areas.

by **Reader** Mon Dec 14, 2015 10:17 pm

Nathan, will try to get to this plus your argument with our Septon and Brother Turpin tomorrow. Kick me on Wednesday if I've still not done it.

by **Loreia** Thu Dec 17, 2015 3:09 am

Arranging a Reunion
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Still currently in our meeting with Adham Daleford. Jorah has a question for him.

by **Yoren longshore** Fri Dec 18, 2015 11:31 am

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What is it about me coming up against the scary ones?

by **Baelon Drakeson** Fri Dec 18, 2015 12:17 pm

Psh. Haig's a big teddybear.

by **Benedict Marsten** Fri Dec 18, 2015 3:40 pm

Sent you a PM about negotiations with Benji and Myles, Only the Young thread.

by **Yoren longshore** Fri Dec 18, 2015 4:08 pm

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Another thread, this just requires the narrator approval.

by **Septon Arlyn** Sat Dec 19, 2015 4:35 pm

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Kinda am old thread, just need some brothers input

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Just let us know if Luecian's plan works /if there is a bear or 2 ect. Thanks

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Personal form stuff

Also this one

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by **Ereth Redwain** Sat Dec 19, 2015 7:43 pm

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Needs attention/wrap up if needed

by **Luecian LongBow** Tue Dec 22, 2015 12:13 am

Quick Reminder on the below thread Smile

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by **Ser Jorah Holt** Tue Dec 22, 2015 12:21 pm

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Symon blackwood thread

by **Gwyneth Drakeson** Tue Dec 22, 2015 1:03 pm

I know you're super busy, but any chance of rumors for Day 5 and 6? Smile

by **Daveth Coldbrook** Tue Dec 22, 2015 5:22 pm

Not on the critical path, but when you have time, I'd like to get [url=this intrigue][/url] started.

by **Davain Bartheld** Tue Dec 22, 2015 5:39 pm

Looking to wrap up this investigation.

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by **Reader** Tue Dec 22, 2015 10:11 pm

Gwyneth Drakeson wrote:I know you're super busy, but any chance of rumors for Day 5 and 6?

Very sorry these were missing, thought I'd posted them. Embarassed

A few more to follow once I've wrapped up events and reviewed some threads, but might not happen until post Christmas.

by **Ser Walton Dulver** Thu Dec 24, 2015 4:14 pm

Mr., we need Your verdict here :;
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by **Ser Walton Dulver** Mon Dec 28, 2015 9:32 pm

little reminder Embarassed

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by **Lady Corrine Marsten** Tue Dec 29, 2015 11:59 am

Ser Walton Dulver wrote:little reminder

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Reader's last post indicated what you need to do. You need to rewrite the whole thing. PM Reader if you need help rewriting, but the thread can't progress until you fix it.

by **Ser Walton Dulver** Tue Dec 29, 2015 12:05 pm

Lady Corrine Marsten wrote:
Ser Walton Dulver wrote:little reminder

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Reader's last post indicated what you need to do. You need to rewrite the whole thing. PM Reader if you need help rewriting, but the thread can't progress until you fix it.

it's already rewritten

by **Lady Corrine Marsten** Tue Dec 29, 2015 12:07 pm

Ser Walton Dulver wrote:
Lady Corrine Marsten wrote:
Ser Walton Dulver wrote:little reminder

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Reader's last post indicated what you need to do. You need to rewrite the whole thing. PM Reader if you need help rewriting, but the thread can't progress until you fix it.

it's already rewritten

You still haven't removed Ser Myles' parts or put in standard grammar. Both are things Reader said in his post you needed to deal with.

by **Ser Walton Dulver** Tue Dec 29, 2015 12:14 pm

if now it's not good, then I don't know already Rolling Eyes

by **Lady Corrine Marsten** Tue Dec 29, 2015 12:31 pm

Ser Walton Dulver wrote:if now it's not good, then I don't know already

It's quite simple. Read what Reader said. It's not good because you're writing actions for an NPC who is not yours. You can't write on Ser Myles' behalf, as he is Reader's character to control. You need to delete that second post altogether, and take out everything except Walton's direct actions, speech, and thoughts from the first post (mechanical stuff like rolls stay, obviously).

You also need to use inverted commas for all speech lines, because that's basic grammar. Reader has asked for proper speech notation several times. It's a bare minimum requirement for this group, and it's easy. If you can't do it, then this isn't the game for you.

by **Reader** Wed Dec 30, 2015 12:39 am

Lady Corrine Marsten wrote:
Ser Walton Dulver wrote:if now it's not good, then I don't know already

It's quite simple. Read what Reader said. It's not good because you're writing actions for an NPC who is not yours. You can't write on Ser Myles' behalf, as he is Reader's character to control. You need to delete that second post altogether, and take out everything except Walton's direct actions, speech, and thoughts from the first post (mechanical stuff like rolls stay, obviously).

You also need to use inverted commas for all speech lines, because that's basic grammar. Reader has asked for proper speech notation several times. It's a bare minimum requirement for this group, and it's easy. If you can't do it, then this isn't the game for you.

Thanks Corrine.

Everyone here has different standards of English (hell, I grew up near Glasgow, so I'm much weaker than many of those with English as a second language!), but we can all do our part on grammar to make things easy to read. Smile

NPC stuff is mainly just to stop a slippery slope of people directing my characters: even things that seem innocuous can lead to other people pushing things further. I'll review the thread and see what shape it's in and get things moving there!

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